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F is for Fade by Nilanja F is for Fade by Nilanja
Sometimes when we dream we have really strong feelings. So strong that they seem almost real. But then we wake up and the dream is over...
but there is still a tiny bit left of that certain feeling...it becomes less and less, it fades away and then you forgot how it felt, forgot how it was...because it is gone.


my first attempt in creating something based on real feelings...

for the smoke I used this stock [link] and some brushes
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I'm not fan of the star-system, but I have to use it to be able to submit the critique. Please understand that it's the text that counts, not the stars.

As I see this image you want help with how you can make it better and as I read the photo you want a little tad more punch to the feeling you've allready established here.

I'll start with the smoke.
Since this is conceptual, I won't rattle much with the concept as a whole, but I think i would have moved the smoketrail nearest to you(?) a bit up, so it looks like it comes from somewhere with more drama, like your mouth or nose. Right now it looks to me as it's coming from the blanket, which necessarily isn't wrong, but a blanket can't match something living when it comes to emotion. However the smoke isn't supposed to look like a dragonsbreath, so just make sure it's visible that the smoke has an intersting trail, it doesn't need to be very visible, because smoke moves smoothly and disappears in the same way.

I like the way the smoke looks in your photo, it looks like it could belong there, it's maybe a little bright, but that doesn't ruin the effect at all.

As I see it this is an image I would be careful adjusting to much, because it good as it is in a way, but I'd try to reduce the highlights a little bit and maybe I'd darken the shadow just slightly.
Reducing the highlights in the picture as a whole would give you a bit more detail in the brightest areas of the image.
Darkening the shadow would make the lights seem brighter.
Like I said at the top of this paragraph, be careful with how much you adjust it, as it looks good now. These are just some tips on how to increase detail and contrast.

As of right now you've got the whitebalance as it look more or less correctly adjusted to the light. One way to give a little punch to the feeling is the make it slightly colder, so pulling down the temperature a little bit and when I say "a little bit" I mean just a tiny bit, you don't want it too cold/blue. This can be done in most editing software and as I see you use CS5, camera raw is a good place to start.

My conclusion of this image is that you can add some slight contrast to it to add some drama. Reducing the temperature would also make it look colder than it is. Both of these changing is subject to personaltaste and making it colder isn't necessarily the right way to go, but you can add some more contrast.
Remember that this is the type of image which is supposed to make the viewer ponder on what's going on. You have established this effect well.

This is the kind of image that needs to have an intersting title and you've got that. As mentioned it's supposed to make the viewer think. When I say this I say it because this image isn't something that would stand out in say a list of 24 thumbnails - it just can't be that contrasty.

Overall I think you've done a great job, but try adding a slight contrast to the image as a whole and if the temperature isn't working - don't change it.

Hope this was helpful :)
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Zouberi Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2013   Photographer
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gooeyshmooey Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Nice picture! BTW I reeeeallly like your haircut!!
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Nilanja Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2012
aww thanks^^
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:iconciins:
ciiNs Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2012  Student Photographer
Awesome work - I love it!
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:iconnilanja:
Nilanja Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2012
thanks a lot :blowkiss:
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:icongapizabala:
gapizabala Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2012
I love you :D
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:iconnilanja:
Nilanja Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2012
^^
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darkHunTer2009 Featured By Owner Sep 9, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
I LOVE IT> :heart:
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:iconnilanja:
Nilanja Featured By Owner Sep 9, 2012
oh thank you :tighthug:
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darkHunTer2009 Featured By Owner Sep 9, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
You're welcome :) :dalove:
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:iconrazzor40:
razzor40 Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2012
zoom/radial blur würde das Foto sicher noch ne Spur besser machen.
Ist aber ein guter Shot :trophy: :handshake:
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:iconnilanja:
Nilanja Featured By Owner Sep 9, 2012
meinst du beim rauch?

danke :D
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:iconrazzor40:
razzor40 Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2012
in der mitte alles scharf nur blur am rand
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:iconnilanja:
Nilanja Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2012
ah verstehe^^
hmmm
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A-Negative-Blood Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2012
Amazing:heart:
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:iconnilanja:
Nilanja Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2012
thank you :la:
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A-Negative-Blood Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2012
np!!:)
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:iconnilanja:
Nilanja Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2012
thank you :la:
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gigi50 Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
SO true Well said !
I even dream once I was floating and I could see myself sleeping
it felt so real and remembered well when I woke up, well still remember !
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:iconnilanja:
Nilanja Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2012
oh yeah I had a similar dream too^^
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:iconsmilekeeper:
smilekeeper Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Oh how true this is. . . :l
Especially, when it's a dream you particularly liked and you just can't remember it.
Is this what you meant in the journal the other day? I can say you did pretty well.
()_()
(,_,)
(__) <---- Supposed to be a sad bunny.
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:iconnilanja:
Nilanja Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2012
I didn't mean exactly this but I know that feeling as well^^
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:iconsmilekeeper:
smilekeeper Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Oh, okay. Nevermind. (:
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tiamat9 Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2012
As always, you are a vision of incredible beauty. Great shot. I love the lighting and ambiance.
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:iconnilanja:
Nilanja Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2012
aaaw thank you :blush:
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tiamat9 Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2012
You're welcome:hug:.
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MA-Graphics Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
i hear you. nice shot :clap:
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:iconnilanja:
Nilanja Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2012
:huggle:
thanks :D
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:iconma-graphics:
MA-Graphics Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
you are very welcome :)
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:iconatarts:
ATArts Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2012  Student Digital Artist
Super =)
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:iconnilanja:
Nilanja Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2012
dankeschön :tighthug:
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Kezra Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2012  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
Excellent concept and very well executed. Looks gorgeous!
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:iconnilanja:
Nilanja Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2012
thanks very much :la:
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DavidSchermann Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
mh ich kenn das gefühl. ich träume eigentlich recht selten, aber wenn ich etwas träume, dann begleitet mich das meist den ganzen tag. Hab ich das jetzt wirklich geträumt? manchmal kann ich das wirklich nicht unterscheiden.

konzept ist klasse, gefällt mir sehr gut.
den brush hast du ganz fein eingearbeitet. nur der "ursprung" des rauches gefällt mir nicht so. aber das ist geschmackssache :) für mich spielen sich träume im kopf ab, dort hätte ich den rauch angesetzt.
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Nilanja Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2012
ja, ich weiß das auch oft nicht. aber wenn ich was schlimmes träum, fällt mir im traum oft selbst sein, dass es nicht real ist. und dann bin ich erleichtert^^

dankeschön :blowkiss:
meinst du mit ursprung nur das mim kopf, oder der rauch selbst?
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DavidSchermann Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
mh beides :D ich hätte den rauch aus dem kopf gemacht, aber das hätt zum aufbau des fotos nicht gepasst
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Nilanja Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2012
haha ok ;P
ja der beginn es rauches gefällt mir auch nicht hundert pro...
aber ich finde dass es ganz gut passt, dass er aus dem körper kommt, weil man ja im herzen fühlt^^
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DavidSchermann Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
da hast auch wieder recht! und ich muss sagen, obwohl ich am anfang skeptisch war (muss ich zugeben) mag ich dein ABC Projekt sehr!
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:iconnilanja:
Nilanja Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2012
aso? wieso denn das?
danke :la: :dummy:
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DavidSchermann Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
naja ich hab dir eh erzählt wie ich so zu projekten stehe, aber ja, mit so einem ABC projekt muss man sich eh kreativ außeinander setzen. bei 365 days projektem is dem ja nicht so (deswegen bin ich da ein wenig kritisch) :)
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Nilanja Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2012
ja stimmt, allerdings habe ich absolut keine zeitdruck (weswegen ich auch erst bei f bin xD)
G is sehr knifflig. gnifflig xD ich hab noch keine idee...und einen schafsschädel den ich wo einbauen möchte^^
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CatholicusX Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Is it sort of like those romantic dreams?
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:iconnilanja:
Nilanja Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2012
it can be everything^^
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CatholicusX Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I do notice that dreams are more intimate than even real life.
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:iconnilanja:
Nilanja Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2012
really?
I think it depends...
dreams can show your fears and desires
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:iconcatholicusx:
CatholicusX Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
ah yes I agree.
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enigmasi Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2012  Professional Digital Artist
my life also so real than my dreams
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:iconlamollesse:
Lamollesse Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2012   Photographer
you take too much drug too
I feel less alone now^
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:iconnilanja:
Nilanja Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2012
hahahaha :rofl:
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Lamollesse Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2012   Photographer
G is for Drug
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